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Couldn't figure out anywhere else to post this.




Topic started on 27-11-2007 @ 01:50 AM by grimreaper797


So I was writing a couple things. Late last night and late tonight. Posted it on chat and was told to post it up. Don't know where it goes, but if the mods have a better place to put it, let me know.

Here ya go:

First one. Lets call It "Fading"

Oh unpredictable world
You betray me, my cold hearted friend
A sudden twist in our fate
Fallen to the ground, where I should stand

Time grows slow, the world will fade
I can hear the willows whispering
A song they will seldom sing
The ballad of a soul, soon to part

In time, all is forgotten
All is forgiven, balance and peace
My time here seems overstay
Enjoy this chaotic harmony

I can hear the rhythmic song
Played within my body, the tempo slows
The song has now been complete
Fallen to the ground, now where I lay


Second one we will call, "The Cursed"

Another day has gone by
Endless walking on this shadowed earth
Among all these fallen soul
I am the only one who is cursed

every night I lay my head
Reveling imprisoned memories
Grabbing onto long lost hope
While weeping sorrowed symphonies

The flood of change strikes again
Leaving behind only dirt and sand
And a house a memories
This lonesome house we built together

And as this endless dream ends
This shadowed earth has done its worst
Among all these fallen souls
I am the only one who is cursed



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reply posted on 27-11-2007 @ 01:55 AM by tetsujin420


Dude yes! Im so glad you posted your art here! Hope you post more later on! Well see ya in chat bro!



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reply posted on 27-11-2007 @ 01:16 PM by grimreaper797


any feedback appriciated.

not a one liner lol



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reply posted on 27-11-2007 @ 01:32 PM by AccessDenied


Amazing.Very well written.Keep writing.
Ahem..I believe The Duckster is correct here..we need a forum for poetry.
Any Chance Amigos?



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reply posted on 28-11-2007 @ 10:54 PM by grimreaper797


thanks for the feedback. I assume this will be moved to the poetry forum once it is created.



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reply posted on 10-2-2008 @ 03:00 AM by grimreaper797


I only got two replies to this?

And btw, did a peotry forum ever get through?



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